Positives- Suspenseful and interesting opening sequence
- Contains lots of conventions: tension, low key lighting,
- Prompts questions
- Detailed plot
- Thoughtful plot
- Good ident idea
- Unusual and original idea
- Interesting plot
- Good attention to detail
Negatives- Too confusing
- Needs more detail
- Too much info
- The plot is too open
- The plot twist is not much of a twist
- Needs more thought on the setting
Improvements- Too open so i need to include short flashbacks of how the character got into this position to answer a few questions
- I need to make the audience ask the right questions by including short scenes from previous action scenes
- My plot doesn't seem to match up with the plot of the opening narrative. I need to use certain shots to link them
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