Second Cut Feedback

Positives:
Good use of shot variation
Really liked the eye close up in the torture scene
The low angle of the protagonist in the present works really well
The use of soundtracks build the tension well
Mouth close ups are effective
Good use of cinematography.

 Negatives
The filter on our Puzzle Productions ident is too much
The soundtracks end too abruptly

Improvements
We need to fade in and out the soundtracks- We have faded in and out all of the soundtracks to help our product flow
Maybe add a voice over- We have since added a voice over during the flashback where the protagonist signs a contract and collects a parcel
Maybe rearrange the flashbacks- Since adding a voice over to one of the flashbacks, we have decided that we do not need to re arrange the shots to make them make sense. Also, as it is a thriller, our product needs to stimulate the audience into asking questions, so there needs to be some mystery in the product
Maybe use a soundtrack to the scenes in the present to make the present scenes clearer- We feel that having another soundtrack for the present scenes would be too much and may detract from the overall film